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DB Sommer
15th December 2004, 08:42 PM
Family Relations
[An Azumanga Daioh fic]

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are owned by Kiyohiko Azuma, Genco, J.C. Staff, and ADV Films.

Writer's forward: This is a one shot, and not a set of vignettes. It takes
place during the second year, meaning all of the girls are in Yukari's
class.

xxxxxxxxxxxx

The door to the classroom slid back and a bleary-eyed Yukari trudged into
the room, lips curled back in a grimace of distaste. She walked up to the
podium, slammed her books down and stared at the students sitting in their
seats. Every one of them was cheerful and attentive, waiting patiently for
her to bestow kernels of knowledge upon them.

"Morning people," Yukari spat contemptuously. "I hate you all!"

The class looked hesitantly at one another. It was going to be one of 'those
days' again.

Yukari glowered at the assembled students. "Here's today's lesson, and it's
perhaps the most important that you'll ever learn in your entire lives."

Chiyo pulled out a pencil and paper. "What is it?"

"Never mix sake and bourbon. You'll pay for it the next day." She held her
hand to her temple for a moment, then continued looking over the class. When
no one said anything, she prodded them with a, "Well?"

Kagura rose to the bait. "Well what?"

"Aren't you going to ask me why I was in such a foul mood that I felt
compelled to mix sake and bourbon?"

The class stared at her blankly.

"If I was Nyamo, I bet you would have asked," Yukari grumbled.

Osaka stood up and raised her hand.

That cheered Yukari up. "What is it, Osaka?"

"We didn't think you actually needed an excuse to drink," Osaka answered.

Yukari shot her a dirty look. "It just so happens I got a call the other
day. It was from my brother. He's coming in from Hokkaido to visit."

The class stared at her in surprise.

Tomo asked, "Is he younger or older than you?"

"Younger," Yukari answered.

Tomo turned to Yomi. "Wow! You think her parents would have learned their
lesson after having her."

A thrown eraser collided with her head.

"What's he like?" Chiyo asked.

Yukari pondered that. After a few moments of indecision, she said, "You know
those hentai movies with the tentacle demons? He's like that."

The class's eyes widened at the statement.

"Only worse," Yukari added.

Their jaws dropped as well.

"You should ask Nyamo. She dated him once in high school," Yukari said. "She
was going through a self-destructive phase at the time. She got better
though. Right after the date, as it turned out." Yukari continued grumbling.
"I need something to distract me, so here's what we'll do. All of you tell
me about the weird relatives you have."

"Why?" Yomi dared to ask.

"If yours are worse than mine, it might make me feel better."

The class sighed in exasperation.

Xxxxxxxx

As lunch time rolled around, Tomo had taken the role of ringleader and
gathered the girls together to confront Nyamo about her encounter with
Yukari's brother. They found her sitting at her desk in the teacher's
lounge, tidying up some papers.

Tomo acted as spokeswoman. "Nyamo-sensei."

Nyamo, having long since given up correcting them about using her first
name, smiled pleasantly and said, "Yes?"

"What's Yukari-sensei's brother like?"

Nyamo flinched. "Why are you asking me about that?!" The question was asked
so quickly it almost sounded like one word rather than a string of them.

"Yukari-sensei said you dated him."

Nyamo's entire body shuddered once, a mini-epileptic seizure that left as
quickly as it came. "No, I didn't."

"But Yukari-sensei said you did," Osaka insisted.

Another shudder claimed the teacher, one more violent than the last, and a
fleeting look of terror crossed her face. "No, I'd definitely remember
something like that."

Yomi shrugged, "Oh, I guess she was mistak-" She stopped abruptly as Nyamo
swatted as something behind her. "What is it?"

"I thought I felt something try to grab me." Another shudder wracked her,
and she swatted at something only she could see once again.

The girls began backing away. "Anyway, it was nice seeing you again," Chiyo
tried saying cheerfully, despite moving backward in great haste.

The girls watched Nyamo swing wildly at the air around her again and curse,
"Damn those hands! They're everywhere, like a swarm of insects! Slap at one,
and another gets you somewhere else!"

Once out of the teacher's lounge, the girls began talking among themselves.
Tomo said, "Did that whole twitching bit remind you of someone else?"

"Who?" Osaka asked.

Tomo turned to Chiyo. "Chiyo-chan, how about we take a ride in Yukari's
car?"

Chiyo shook violently, her eyes taking on a distant gaze.

"You're right," Kagura said as the others nodded in agreement.

It was at that moment Yukari strolled past, on her way to lunch.

Tomo stopped her in the hall. "Hey, Yukari-sensei. Nyamo says she didn't
date your brother."

Yukari shook her head pityingly. "That's easy to understand. Sometimes
people block out traumatic experiences in order to deal with them. When they
do that, they can't remember what happened to them."

Osaka said, "I forget things, like studying for tests, all the time. Maybe
that's what happens to me. I can't be sure, though, since I forget." Her
mind began trying to unravel the conundrum of remembering memory loss.

Chiyo flung herself at Yukari, pulling insistently at her skirt. "How? How
can I do it?!"

Yukari patted Chiyo on the head. "Now, now, you don't want to block out your
memories. Mental trauma builds character."

"I already have enough character!" Chiyo insisted as visions of automotive
near-death experiences danced through her head.

Tomo considered that. "You know, blows to the head can lead to memory loss."

"That would be physical trauma, not mental trauma," Yomi pointed out.

"Same difference." Tomo turned to Chiyo, then swatted her on the top of her
head, eliciting a sharp squeal of pain. "How's that? Did you forget what you
wanted to forget."

"Nevermind," Chiyo said as she rubbed her sore head.

"No really, I can do it." Tomo swatted her in the head again. "How about
now?"

"Stop! Stop!" Chiyo shouted as she ran away, Tomo with her hand raised above
her hand in hot pursuit.

"Wow! Chiyo's going to have the best character of us all," Osaka said
dreamily as she watched the two running around in large circles.

Xxxxxxxxxxx

The bell signaling the end of the day chimed throughout the building.
Relieved at having made it through another day, the girls began packing
their books in anticipation of going home.

"You six, wait here," Yukari said, pointing to Tomo, Osaka, Sakaki, Chiyo,
Yomi, and Kagura. Kaorin remained behind voluntarily, concerned about
Sakaki.

"Why do we have to stay?" Kagura complained.

"I'll need a distraction for when Yoshi comes by," Yukari explained.

"Who's Yoshi?" Yomi asked.

"My brother."

"He's coming here?" Tomo asked.

"Yep. I thought neutral ground would afford me the best opportunity for
escape should the need arise."

The girls stared at each other warily.

It was at that moment the door to the room slid open and a well-dressed
young man, nearly Yukari's age, announced, "I'm here."

The girls looked at him. He was actually a touch on the handsome side, with
short brown hair and above average in height.

"He looks kind of normal," Yomi said.

"So does Yukari," Kagura pointed out.

Yomi conceded the point.

"Big sister!" Yoshi shouted in delight. He ran toward, his arms held out,
eager for an embrace.

Yukari stared distastefully at him, but didn't move.

"It's great to see you," he said as he embraced her.

"It's... to see you too," she muttered unintelligibly.

His arms went from encircling her waist to grabbing her behind. "Hey, you've
been working out. How about giving Little Brother some sugar?"

He tried kissing the now struggling Yukari. She managed to fend off his
desperately puckered lips with one hand pressed against his forehead, while
the other went into a pocket in her skirt. She pulled out a small spritz
bottle and pushed the plunger down, spraying a mist in his eyes.

The effect was instantaneous as Yoshi recoiled away from her, rubbing his
eyes furiously. After several seconds of wiping, his teary eyes stared at
her in accusation. "I can't believe you! How could you mace your very own
little brother?"

"Like this." She hit the plunger and emptied the rest of the contents into
his eyes.

The girls watched in incomprehension at the sight.

"He's... actually worse than she described, isn't he?" Yomi asked.

The others nodded in mute agreement.

They had just finished nodding when Yoshi stopped wiping his eyes and
scowled at Yukari again. Apart from a trace of tear in the corner of his
left eye, they were dry.

"How did you recover so quickly?" Yukari asked in annoyance as she tossed
the empty can away.

"I'm building up a tolerance," Yoshi stated triumphantly.

"That's not something to be proud of," Kaorin muttered under her breath.

It was at that moment Nyamo entered the room. "Yukari, I have those papers
you..." Nyamo took one look into the classroom, then turned to go.

It was too late as Yoshi cried out, "Hey, hey, hey! If it isn't 'DJ'
Kurosawa."

"'DJ'? Why did you call her that?" Tomo asked.

Yoshi turned to the young girl. "It's her nickname. DJ is short for
'Double-Jointed.' She had a reputation among the guys as being really
flexible, if you know what I mean. You could bend her in all sorts of posi-"

A hard fist buried deep in his solar plexus ended the commentary. Yoshi
doubled over, as though a sledgehammer had been buried deep in his gut.
Nyamo stood warily over him, fist held at the ready. "What was that?"

"I... mean... she... was... captain... of... gymnastics... team... and
known... for flexibility," Yoshi gasped out.

"Better," Nyamo said.

It was then Yoshi finally seemed to take notice of the girls in the class.
As his eyes fell upon them, they all instinctively took a step back.

Before any of them could move farther away, Yoshi all but pounced at the
nearest one: Yomi. "And who might you be, my delightful angel of
loveliness?"

"Kiyomi." She was damned if she would tell him her last name. She was going
to make a break for it once she was out of his line of sight, and he might
be able to track her down by it if he knew it.

Yoshi bowed graciously. "Truly you are a rare beauty. Women with glasses are
so sexy," he said suavely.

"Uh, thanks." Was all she could manage as she tried to back away.

As swift as a snake, his hand darted to her behind. "And I like a little
cushion to the tushin', if you know what I mean."

"Double chop!" Yomi cried out as she brought the edge of both her hands
simultaneously down on top of his head. That bought her the time she needed
to escape his grasp and move well out of his reach.

"Can't say I care for martial arts anymore than I do good right hooks." He
directed the last comment toward Nyamo before returning his attention to the
next girl in line: Chiyo.

Realizing his attention had turned her way, and that she was getting that
same bad feeling she got when Kimura looked at her, Chiyo nervously greeted,
"Hello."

"And who might you be?" Yoshi asked.

"Chiyo," she responded.

He handed her a card. "Give me a call in six years. We'll go out and have
some fun."

She read it. "You hand out cards with your name, number, and vital
statistics on them?"

"Only to cute girls. Saves on time." He moved to the next girl: Tomo. "And
who might you be, my... dear?" He stared at her in bewilderment as she
scratched furiously at her crotch through her skirt. "What's wrong?"

Tomo kept scratching away. "Some kind of fungus the doctors can't seem to
identify. But don't worry. They say there's only a sixty percent chance it's
contagious. She held out her hand and said in English. "I'm Tomo."

Yoshi passed her by and moved to the next girl, Kagura.

Suddenly finding herself the center of Yoshi's attention, Kagura panicked.
She wanted to follow Tomo's lead and do something to scare the creep away,
but hadn't had enough time to think of anything. She had to think fast.

Yoshi smiled suavely at her. "And what might your name b-"

There was no time! Kagura blurted out the first thing that came to her. "I'm
a lesbian!"

Yoshi was unmoved. "Babe, give me a chance, and I'll make you switch back."
He winked.

"No thanks! I, uh, already have a girlfriend!" Kagura looped her arm through
the nearest girl to her.

Osaka stared down at the arm grabbing her in confusion. "I thought we were
just friends," she told Kagura.

Kagura shook her head furiously. "Nope. Definitely girlfriends."

Osaka was in awe. "I guess it's true what they say about love sneaking up on
you. I never saw this coming at all."

"Threesomes are more fun," Yoshi pointed out.

"I have my hands full with her." Kagura insisted.

"Can I at least watch?"

"No way!"

Beaten, Yoshi moved on. Kagura breathed a sigh of relief, until she felt a
tug on her arm. "What?"

"Since we're both girls, on White Day, do I give the chocolate to you or do
you give them to me?" Osaka asked.

"Umm. I'm not sure," Kagura said hesitantly, not having counted on Osaka not
picking up on the true, transient nature of their 'relationship.'

"Maybe we should flip a coin."

"We can talk about it later."

"Relationships should be filled with open communication," Osaka insisted.
"If you're going to be close-mouthed, I don't think it's going to work out."

While the two began to argue, Yoshi moved past Osaka and on to the next girl
in line. Unlike the others, Sakaki didn't have the faintest idea of how to
deal with what she knew was to come. Her nature simply didn't allow for
dishonesty or deceit.

Due to Sakaki's height, Yoshi was forced to look up at her. "You're a tall
one, aren't you?"

"Yes," Sakaki said quietly.

"I don't like tall girls. It makes them unfeminine." Yoshi turned away from
her.

Kaorin was at Sakaki's side instantly. Outraged, she shouted. "Sakaki is not
unfeminine! She's the most feminine girl in this entire school! She is the
living epitome of femininity! I only wish I could be one tenth as feminine
as she is!"

Before Kaorin could take another breath, she found her hand fully
encompassed within Yoshi's own. "Oh, you are, you sweet little thing.
Believe me, you are."

It was only then that Kaorin understood the full gravity of her error in
giving Yoshi the opening he had so desperately been looking for. "Don't
touch me!" Kaorin screeched, praying for Sakaki, or anyone, to help her
escape from the creep's clutches.

Salvation came in the form of the door to the room booming open and a deep
baritone voice shout out, "Unhand that girl!"

Yoshi's hands retreated, as though Kaorin was as hot as the sun. She sighed
in relief.

"And who are you?" Yoshi demanded.

Kimura was at Kaorin's side in an instant. "Kaori's significant other."

"You're not my significant anything!" she shouted at the top of her lungs.

"Like this sexy lady would want anything to do with you," Yoshi scoffed.

"Love comes in many different form," Kimura assured him.

"This is true," Osaka nodded, her arm still through Kagura's. The statement
made Kagura sweat profusely.

"No it isn't!" Kaorin shouted, trying to find any avenue of escape.

"Hello!" a melodic voice chimed from the doorway of the classroom.

All the girls turned to see a familiar sight. Kaorin was the most relieved
of them all at the new arrival. Finally, Kimura would leave her alone. "Mrs.
Kimura," she sighed.

"Darling!" The woman gushed as she ran into the room and tried to leap upon
her true love.

Yoshi held up a hand that made her come to an abrupt stop in front of him.
"Now, now, you know how I dislike public displays of affection."

"Sorry, dear." She bowed before him.

Eight jaws dropped in disbelief at the sight.

Yukari was the first to find her voice as she turned to Kimura. "Wh... why
is your wife trying to grab my brother and call him Darling?"

Kimura looked around the room wildly, his eyes moving right past the
newcomer before coming back to rest at Yukari. "My wife isn't here."

"She's right there!" Yukari pointed at the woman standing next to her
brother.

Kimura looked directly at the woman Yukari was pointing to. He stared for a
moment, then turned back to Yukari. "I still don't see her."

"There! There!" Yukari shouted loudly. "Are your glasses foggy?!"

Kimura removed his glasses, wiped them off, and put them back on his face.
"Nope, they're fine. Maybe you need a prescription."

Yukari and Tomo teamed up, grabbing Kimura's head and dragging him until his
face was only inches away from the woman.

"How about now?!" Yukari shouted maniacally.

"I'm sure I'd notice if my wife was here."

The woman shifted her lovestruck face away from Yoshi and looked at Kimura
in a mixture of surprise and delight. "Brother-in-law, I didn't even see you
there!"

Everyone's shock, impossibly, doubled.

Kimura stared at her closely. "Do I know you?"

"Silly, I'm Maya, your wife's twin sister."

"Ah, I didn't recognize you," Kimura said.

All other emotions, distaste, fear, disgust were blotted out among the women
as they stared in disbelief, not even Chiyo's mind able to truly grasp what
was happening.

Yoshi turned to Yukari. "This is why I came by for a visit. I wanted to
introduce you to my fiancee, Maya."

Maya bowed before Yukari. "Hello, it's so nice to meet you. Yoshi's told me
everything about you. Even your measurements. They're pretty impressive."

"Huh?" Was all Yukari could manage.

"But you can't be getting married. You were hitting on every girl here,"
Nyamo shouted as she too found her voice.

Yoshi stared at her in confusion. "I wasn't doing anything of the kind."

"Yes, you were!" Nyamo shouted as all the girls nodded their heads in
agreement.

"I was just being friendly," Yoshi insisted.

Maya agreed. "It's true. While he's friendly around women, he's not the
least bit romantically inclined. I had to ask him out in order to get him to
date me."

"Actually, I think of myself as being quite shy," Yoshi added.

Tomo was the first to say what everyone was thinking. "Wow! She really is
related to Mrs. Kimura. Only someone as messed up as her could marry
something like him."

The others nodded in agreement.

Xxxxxxxxxxxx

[End fic]








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The Eternal Lost Lurker
16th December 2004, 05:34 AM
I died laughing at this, just to let you know upfront. Now my spirit roams
the Internet like one of those cheesy sci-fi horror movies...actually,
that's a lie, but I definitely cracked up when I read this. It made a shitty
day somewhat less shitty. :)

> "Morning people," Yukari spat contemptuously. "I hate you all!"

She hates evening people, too. And noon people. And people on Daylight time.

> "Aren't you going to ask me why I was in such a foul mood that I felt
> compelled to mix sake and bourbon?"

If I were them, I'd be more curious if she was in a GOOD mood.

> Tomo turned to Yomi. "Wow! You think her parents would have learned their
> lesson after having her."

*SNRK*

> Yukari pondered that. After a few moments of indecision, she said, "You
know
> those hentai movies with the tentacle demons? He's like that."

I think I went to lunch with that guy.

> "You should ask Nyamo. She dated him once in high school," Yukari said.
"She
> was going through a self-destructive phase at the time. She got better
> though. Right after the date, as it turned out." Yukari continued
grumbling.
> "I need something to distract me, so here's what we'll do. All of you tell
> me about the weird relatives you have."
>
> "Why?" Yomi dared to ask.
>
> "If yours are worse than mine, it might make me feel better."
>
> The class sighed in exasperation.

Misery loves company. XD

> Tomo acted as spokeswoman. "Nyamo-sensei."
>
> Nyamo, having long since given up correcting them about using her first
> name

I'd think she'd be more exasperated about the 'Nyamo' than about the
first-name. It's not unusual for students to use a favorite teacher's first
name, especially a female teacher, but Nyamo is, well...a childhood
nickname. Not very professional.

> Yomi shrugged, "Oh, I guess she was mistak-" She stopped abruptly as Nyamo
> swatted as something behind her. "What is it?"
>
> "I thought I felt something try to grab me." Another shudder wracked her,
> and she swatted at something only she could see once again.

Poor Nyamo-chan.

> The girls watched Nyamo swing wildly at the air around her again and
curse,
> "Damn those hands! They're everywhere, like a swarm of insects! Slap at
one,
> and another gets you somewhere else!"

They make pills for that now.

> "Wow! Chiyo's going to have the best character of us all," Osaka said
> dreamily as she watched the two running around in large circles.

And Osaka *is* the best character of them all. XD

> His arms went from encircling her waist to grabbing her behind. "Hey,
you've
> been working out. How about giving Little Brother some sugar?"

I like this guy already.

> "I'm building up a tolerance," Yoshi stated triumphantly.
>
> "That's not something to be proud of," Kaorin muttered under her breath.

Heheh.

> Yoshi turned to the young girl. "It's her nickname. DJ is short for
> 'Double-Jointed.' She had a reputation among the guys as being really
> flexible, if you know what I mean. You could bend her in all sorts of
posi-"

H_H

> "Kiyomi." She was damned if she would tell him her last name. She was
going

Koyomi

> As swift as a snake, his hand darted to her behind. "And I like a little
> cushion to the tushin', if you know what I mean."

Baaaad move, in more ways than one.

> "And who might you be?" Yoshi asked.
>
> "Chiyo," she responded.
>
> He handed her a card. "Give me a call in six years. We'll go out and have
> some fun."

Pfft. Amateur.

> Tomo kept scratching away. "Some kind of fungus the doctors can't seem to
> identify. But don't worry. They say there's only a sixty percent chance
it's
> contagious.

When did Tomo get clever? XD Love this, though.

> There was no time! Kagura blurted out the first thing that came to her.
"I'm
> a lesbian!"

The sad thing is, this wouldn't surprise anyone.

> Osaka was in awe. "I guess it's true what they say about love sneaking up
on
> you. I never saw this coming at all."

But who gets the kid when they break up?

> "Threesomes are more fun," Yoshi pointed out.
>
> "I have my hands full with her." Kagura insisted.

I'd think Osaka would be the one with the full hands... n.h

> "I don't like tall girls. It makes them unfeminine." Yoshi turned away
from
> her.

Ouch.

> Kaorin was at Sakaki's side instantly. Outraged, she shouted. "Sakaki is
not
> unfeminine! She's the most feminine girl in this entire school! She is the
> living epitome of femininity! I only wish I could be one tenth as feminine
> as she is!"

*idly pictures Kaorin dreaming about one-tenth of Chiyo-no-chichi offering
her a slice of tomato*


> Salvation came in the form of the door to the room booming open and a deep
> baritone voice shout out, "Unhand that girl!"

Tuxedo Kimura!

> Kimura was at Kaorin's side in an instant. "Kaori's significant other."
>
> "You're not my significant anything!" she shouted at the top of her lungs.

Sure he is. He's her significant pain in the ass.

*snip*

> Kimura stared at her closely. "Do I know you?"
>
> "Silly, I'm Maya, your wife's twin sister."

I shudder to think what the REST of that family is like.

> Tomo was the first to say what everyone was thinking. "Wow! She really is
> related to Mrs. Kimura. Only someone as messed up as her could marry
> something like him."

Heheheh.

Great work, as usual.

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Pete Zaitcev
16th December 2004, 06:35 AM
On Wed, 15 Dec 2004 15:42:45 -0500, "DB Sommer" <sommer@3rdm.net> wrote:

> Family Relations
> [An Azumanga Daioh fic]

Welcome back, DB.

Not much was to suggest, everything was great until about this paragraph:

>[...]
> Tomo was the first to say what everyone was thinking. "Wow! She really is
> related to Mrs. Kimura. Only someone as messed up as her could marry
> something like him."
>
> The others nodded in agreement.

I think the ending was not intense enough. Whole thing kind of wimpered
here, IMHO. But stupidly, I cannot express the problem in words. I checked
how it looked in other of your oneshots:

Carnivale:
Yukari placed a comforting hand on Kagura's shoulder. "That's all right.
If you had proposed to him and he had accepted, I would have had to kill
you for stealing my opportunity from me." She left Kagura and began running
after the dancing man, shouting out how she thought he was cute and she
would let him treat her to dinner.

Houseguests:
Tomo finally interrupted the conversation. "And then you can come by my
house?"

"Sure," Kagura said, since by that time they'll have certainly graduated
and she could get out of it by saying she had to go to college. She had
suffered enough trauma for one lifetime. Knowing there were two more Tomos
in the world was bad enough, actually meeting them would be more than
anyone should have to take.

Sex Education (add-on ending in its own micro-segment, actually)
The principal wandered aimlessly about the halls of the school, his mind
still trying to process exactly what it had seen and failing miserably.
As he walked, lost in thought, he stopped as he came up in front of someone
who was so like him it was as if they were a pair of matched bookends.
They stared at each other for a moment, two mirror images of one another.

"Freak," Kimura said, before walking off.

Field Trip:
[The glass circle] fell out of the window and to the ground below,
shattering against the concrete.

"Easily the best gift I've ever received," Tomo said quickly.

The others nodded their heads in agreement.

They are all somewhat different, but... And the puzzling thing is, "Relations"
do not end abrubtly, there's no simple technical error: scene ends, everything
is resolved. Funny how "Field Trip" ends with exactly the same sentence, but
its air is different. Maybe what happened there was not obvious, and what
happened in Relations was?

-- Pete

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Michael A Chase
16th December 2004, 06:57 AM
On 12/15/2004 12:42 PM, DB Sommer said:

> The door to the classroom slid back and a bleary-eyed Yukari trudged into
> the room, lips curled back in a grimace of distaste. She walked up to the
> podium, slammed her books down and stared at the students sitting in their
> seats. Every one of them was cheerful and attentive, waiting patiently for
> her to bestow kernels of knowledge upon them.

Where're Tomo and Osaka?

> "Stop! Stop!" Chiyo shouted as she ran away, Tomo with her hand raised above
> her hand in hot pursuit.
>
> "Wow! Chiyo's going to have the best character of us all," Osaka said
> dreamily as she watched the two running around in large circles.

Where's Osaka's paper fan?

> He tried kissing the now struggling Yukari. She managed to fend off his
> desperately puckered lips with one hand pressed against his forehead, while
> the other went into a pocket in her skirt. She pulled out a small spritz
> bottle and pushed the plunger down, spraying a mist in his eyes.
>
> The effect was instantaneous as Yoshi recoiled away from her, rubbing his
> eyes furiously. After several seconds of wiping, his teary eyes stared at
> her in accusation. "I can't believe you! How could you mace your very own
> little brother?"

I thought it would be holy water.

> Tomo kept scratching away. "Some kind of fungus the doctors can't seem to
> identify. But don't worry. They say there's only a sixty percent chance it's
> contagious. She held out her hand and said in English. "I'm Tomo."

That seems a bit too smart for her. I sort of expected her to try her
French, but the result might be too cruel even for Tomo.

> "Love comes in many different {form : forms}," Kimura assured him.

--
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Lawrence Chu
16th December 2004, 08:03 AM
> > There was no time! Kagura blurted out the first thing that came to her.
> "I'm
> > a lesbian!"
>
> The sad thing is, this wouldn't surprise anyone.

Well, there WAS that entire baseball team...

....unless Osaka foresaw the Princess Nine...

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TJ
16th December 2004, 08:03 PM
hah, thats true, it didn't say -which- baseball team, did it? neat tie in

Lawrence Chu wrote:

>>>There was no time! Kagura blurted out the first thing that came to her.
>>>
>>>
>>"I'm
>>
>>
>>>a lesbian!"
>>>
>>>
>>The sad thing is, this wouldn't surprise anyone.
>>
>>
>
>Well, there WAS that entire baseball team...
>
>...unless Osaka foresaw the Princess Nine...
>
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DB Sommer
17th December 2004, 03:43 AM
Pete Zaitcev wrote:

>
> Welcome back, DB.
>
> Not much was to suggest, everything was great until about this paragraph:
>
> >[...]
> > Tomo was the first to say what everyone was thinking. "Wow! She really
is
> > related to Mrs. Kimura. Only someone as messed up as her could marry
> > something like him."
> >
> > The others nodded in agreement.
>
> I think the ending was not intense enough. Whole thing kind of wimpered
> here, IMHO. But stupidly, I cannot express the problem in words. I checked
> how it looked in other of your oneshots:

Yeah, it's not as good a punchline to end on as some, but I felt that was
where it had to end and it was the best I could come up with. I didn't think
Carnivales was all that strong either, but it's hard to force comedy.
Overall I'm satisfied with it.


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DB Sommer
17th December 2004, 03:45 AM
Michael A Chase wrote:

>
> On 12/15/2004 12:42 PM, DB Sommer said:
>
> > The door to the classroom slid back and a bleary-eyed Yukari trudged
into
> > the room, lips curled back in a grimace of distaste. She walked up to
the
> > podium, slammed her books down and stared at the students sitting in
their
> > seats. Every one of them was cheerful and attentive, waiting patiently
for
> > her to bestow kernels of knowledge upon them.
>
> Where're Tomo and Osaka?

They want her to, it's just that neither of their minds works in a way which
easily accepts information. :)

>
> > "Stop! Stop!" Chiyo shouted as she ran away, Tomo with her hand raised
above
> > her hand in hot pursuit.
> >
> > "Wow! Chiyo's going to have the best character of us all," Osaka said
> > dreamily as she watched the two running around in large circles.
>
> Where's Osaka's paper fan?

Heh. Wrong fic. Killing all of the girls was enough for me.

>
> >
> > The effect was instantaneous as Yoshi recoiled away from her, rubbing
his
> > eyes furiously. After several seconds of wiping, his teary eyes stared
at
> > her in accusation. "I can't believe you! How could you mace your very
own
> > little brother?"
>
> I thought it would be holy water.

Nah. Something a bit more caustic.

>
> > Tomo kept scratching away. "Some kind of fungus the doctors can't seem
to
> > identify. But don't worry. They say there's only a sixty percent chance
it's
> > contagious. She held out her hand and said in English. "I'm Tomo."
>
> That seems a bit too smart for her. I sort of expected her to try her
> French, but the result might be too cruel even for Tomo.

Don't want to overuse the joke either. :)

Thanks for the help, as always it's appreciated.

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DB Sommer
17th December 2004, 03:56 AM
The Eternal Lost Lurker wrote:

>
> I died laughing at this, just to let you know upfront. Now my spirit roams
> the Internet like one of those cheesy sci-fi horror movies...actually,
> that's a lie, but I definitely cracked up when I read this. It made a
shitty
> day somewhat less shitty. :)

Glad it helped in some way.

>
> > "Morning people," Yukari spat contemptuously. "I hate you all!"
>
> She hates evening people, too. And noon people. And people on Daylight
time.

But mostly morning people. I dislike them too. I am very much a night owl.

>
> > "Aren't you going to ask me why I was in such a foul mood that I felt
> > compelled to mix sake and bourbon?"
>
> If I were them, I'd be more curious if she was in a GOOD mood.

Heh.

>
> > Tomo turned to Yomi. "Wow! You think her parents would have learned
their
> > lesson after having her."
>
> *SNRK*

Well, she does raise a valid point.

>
> > Yukari pondered that. After a few moments of indecision, she said, "You
> know
> > those hentai movies with the tentacle demons? He's like that."
>
> I think I went to lunch with that guy.

Luckily, I never have.

>
> >
> > "If yours are worse than mine, it might make me feel better."
> >
> > The class sighed in exasperation.
>
> Misery loves company. XD

Yep. I think that might be one of Yukari's words to live by type phrases.

>
> > Tomo acted as spokeswoman. "Nyamo-sensei."
> >
> > Nyamo, having long since given up correcting them about using her first
> > name
>
> I'd think she'd be more exasperated about the 'Nyamo' than about the
> first-name. It's not unusual for students to use a favorite teacher's
first
> name, especially a female teacher, but Nyamo is, well...a childhood
> nickname. Not very professional.

Oops. Quite right. Will change

>
> > Yomi shrugged, "Oh, I guess she was mistak-" She stopped abruptly as
Nyamo
> > swatted as something behind her. "What is it?"
> >
> > "I thought I felt something try to grab me." Another shudder wracked
her,
> > and she swatted at something only she could see once again.
>
> Poor Nyamo-chan.

It only hurts when something prods the memory, though.

>
> > The girls watched Nyamo swing wildly at the air around her again and
> curse,
> > "Damn those hands! They're everywhere, like a swarm of insects! Slap at
> one,
> > and another gets you somewhere else!"
>
> They make pills for that now.

Heh

>
> > "Wow! Chiyo's going to have the best character of us all," Osaka said
> > dreamily as she watched the two running around in large circles.
>
> And Osaka *is* the best character of them all. XD

They're all good for me. Tomo is probably the best for writing purposes
since nothing is beyond her ability to instigate things

>
> > His arms went from encircling her waist to grabbing her behind. "Hey,
> you've
> > been working out. How about giving Little Brother some sugar?"
>
> I like this guy already.

Heh

>
> > "I'm building up a tolerance," Yoshi stated triumphantly.
> >
> > "That's not something to be proud of," Kaorin muttered under her breath.
>
> Heheh.

Depends on if you're the one being maced. :)

>
> > Yoshi turned to the young girl. "It's her nickname. DJ is short for
> > 'Double-Jointed.' She had a reputation among the guys as being really
> > flexible, if you know what I mean. You could bend her in all sorts of
> posi-"
>
> H_H

It could be just talk. Guys do do that, you know. :)

>
>
> > As swift as a snake, his hand darted to her behind. "And I like a little
> > cushion to the tushin', if you know what I mean."
>
> Baaaad move, in more ways than one.

Yep

>
> > "And who might you be?" Yoshi asked.
> >
> > "Chiyo," she responded.
> >
> > He handed her a card. "Give me a call in six years. We'll go out and
have
> > some fun."
>
> Pfft. Amateur.

But he does have the incest thing going for him

>
> > Tomo kept scratching away. "Some kind of fungus the doctors can't seem
to
> > identify. But don't worry. They say there's only a sixty percent chance
> it's
> > contagious.
>
> When did Tomo get clever? XD Love this, though.

She has her moment, few and far between perhaps, but they are there.

>
> > There was no time! Kagura blurted out the first thing that came to her.
> "I'm
> > a lesbian!"
>
> The sad thing is, this wouldn't surprise anyone.

Well, perhaps to an outside person. None of the girls demonstrat much in the
way of a sex drive period.

>
> > Osaka was in awe. "I guess it's true what they say about love sneaking
up
> on
> > you. I never saw this coming at all."
>
> But who gets the kid when they break up?

Heh

>
> > "Threesomes are more fun," Yoshi pointed out.
> >
> > "I have my hands full with her." Kagura insisted.
>
> I'd think Osaka would be the one with the full hands... n.h

Nah. I picture Osaka as being the one that's hard to handle.

>
> > "I don't like tall girls. It makes them unfeminine." Yoshi turned away
> from
> > her.
>
> Ouch.

I thought this might be a good swerve for Sakaki to get out of things,
though.

>
> > Kaorin was at Sakaki's side instantly. Outraged, she shouted. "Sakaki is
> not
> > unfeminine! She's the most feminine girl in this entire school! She is
the
> > living epitome of femininity! I only wish I could be one tenth as
feminine
> > as she is!"
>
> *idly pictures Kaorin dreaming about one-tenth of Chiyo-no-chichi offering
> her a slice of tomato*

No that's surreal.

>
>
> > Salvation came in the form of the door to the room booming open and a
deep
> > baritone voice shout out, "Unhand that girl!"
>
> Tuxedo Kimura!

Heh. It is that kind of dramatic entrance, isn't it?

>
> > Kimura was at Kaorin's side in an instant. "Kaori's significant other."
> >
> > "You're not my significant anything!" she shouted at the top of her
lungs.
>
> Sure he is. He's her significant pain in the ass.

Well, he is that.

>
> *snip*
>
> > Kimura stared at her closely. "Do I know you?"
> >
> > "Silly, I'm Maya, your wife's twin sister."
>
> I shudder to think what the REST of that family is like.

Perhaps I'll write it some day.

>
> > Tomo was the first to say what everyone was thinking. "Wow! She really
is
> > related to Mrs. Kimura. Only someone as messed up as her could marry
> > something like him."
>
> Heheheh.
>
> Great work, as usual.

Thanks. Glad it met with your approval.

DB Sommer



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The Eternal Lost Lurker
17th December 2004, 08:12 AM
> > > Yukari pondered that. After a few moments of indecision, she said,
"You
> > know
> > > those hentai movies with the tentacle demons? He's like that."
> >
> > I think I went to lunch with that guy.
>
> Luckily, I never have.

Actually, on further reflection, I think I *AM* that guy. @_@

> > Poor Nyamo-chan.
>
> It only hurts when something prods the memory, though.

*takes out everything from that sentence after "prods" for maximum
wrongness*

> > > He handed her a card. "Give me a call in six years. We'll go out and
> have
> > > some fun."
> >
> > Pfft. Amateur.
>
> But he does have the incest thing going for him

This is true.

> > > There was no time! Kagura blurted out the first thing that came to
her.
> > "I'm
> > > a lesbian!"
> >
> > The sad thing is, this wouldn't surprise anyone.
>
> Well, perhaps to an outside person. None of the girls demonstrat much in
the
> way of a sex drive period.

[Osaka] "Mine got too close to a magnet..."

> > I'd think Osaka would be the one with the full hands... n.h
>
> Nah. I picture Osaka as being the one that's hard to handle.

Not quite what I meant. :P

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