Christian Clark
9th April 2004, 06:00 PM
For all those who replied; thank you. It's definately appreciated.
Now, for the onlist replies;
Adrian Thymes: I noticed the character mistakes too. I'll make sure to keep it as a text file *out* of Word so the formatting problems won't return. But I can't guarantee that since I use Word primarily. If there's any shareware/freeware word processors out there than I use, I'm more than willing to try them.
DB Sommer:
<Lain's a rare one to pop up here. Of course, I didn't really care for the series, so...>
*shrugs* No biggie. I can also understand why a lot of people would have a hard time with it since it doesn't exactly follow normal storytelling conventions... or at least, that's how I see it.
>>chance to say goodbye. And now, wherever Alice was, Lain >>was not.
>Interesting way of putting it.
I thought so too. That's why I used it.
>>Walking through what looked like a gate, she strolled
>>through a park that still remained as it was, despite her
>>condition. Lain liked parks. Parks always seemed to calm >>her troubled mind, even in this frame of perspective.
>'frame of perspective' seems a bit off, though. Might want
>to reword it.
Hmm, would 'point of view' work better, you think?
>>Whenever she thought of them they
>them, they (I think)
Yes, you're right. I'll be sure to fix that.
>> also seemed to appear... or did she appear in one? It
>>mattered little.
>It might matter to the park. :)
Heh. It never occured to me that parks have feelings too. :p
>>Sitting on a rock, she watched existence pass by in an
>>instant. Everything passed by and passed on. None would
>>notice her. It was nothing knew. Was it?
>>?Not really.?
> Odd characters here
I'm not sure if it's my email client or the coding from Word (or both) that's making those characters appear where there should be quotation marks.
>>?What is this place??
>>?It is what it is. And it is where we are.?
>>She blinked at his answer
> Don't know why. She's used to the duality. :)
Or is she? :p
>> The man turned towards her and said in a manner of a
>>father gently chiding his offspring. ?You didn?t listen. >>I said: No one is ever really forgotten.?
> Man: I think. If some are forgotten, I don't remember. I
>guess I forgot them.
It may be just me, but that sounds like something Terry Pratchett would have said. (Side note: I just finished 'Mort' recently and I loved it.)
>> She sat on the rock beside him and looked into the same
>>place he did, digesting his words carefully. If no one is
>>forgotten, she wondered, and then
> think you can drop 'and'
Will do.
>>She noticed a small smile tugging at the corners of his
>>lips when he answered, ?A name that I nearly forgot a long >>time ago. Among my people, I was named
> Wade. It's a good name, and easy to pronounce.
Heh. bet Ten Oh wishes he had a name like that every once it a while.
>> I wish I had a basic explanation as to what the heck
>>happened, but I'm still sorting out the details.
> It happens. Sometimes you just have to go with the flow.
*nods* And who knows, maybe if I keep it up, I'll eventually write something good. :)
>> As for Lain?s companion, I would doubt that Ten Oh would
>>act like Kujaku, but since this would take place a long
>>time after the end of RG Veda,
> Only saw a bit of that, and don't remember it anymore. I'll >have to rewatch it someday. Once I'm finished with my
>current anime
I remember seeing the anime, but most of my source material came from the manga since I own it. (Thank heaven for web translations.)
> Thanks for sharing.
> DB Sommer
You're welcome and thanks for reviewing.
Finally; Zorknot.
Nice fic. Really captured the tone of Lain. And for the second matrix movie for that matter.
<Which actually kinda confuses me since I've not yet seen the second, nor third Matrix movie. I may eventually, but it'll probably be when I'm so bored I'd be willing to waste four hours of my life in the Wachowskian philosophical quagmire.>
Unfortunately the drawn out philosophical discussions were the worst part of both. You captured that very well, but I think it's one of those things you should just set free:-)
<Well, I was hoping to just present an open ended story that continued from the end of Lain. Truth be told, I felt the anime story was complete to the point where fanfics like this were not neccesary. But I went ahead and wrote it anyway. :)>
I wonder now though, why no one has done a Lain/Matrix
crossover? Maybe they have and I haven't seen it?
<Actually, someone has. The story was called Synthesis and from what I could tell, it starts quite a while after the end of the first movie. It's not complete and it hasn't been updated in quite a while. I emailed the author a while back and from what I remember, the author was having the usual real life interference. Oh well.
On another note, I just may brave the other two movies and endure the pain for an fanfic idea. Because I liked 'Synthesis' and figure that Lain could take on the +100 Smiths in her own way, I've been tempted to give it a shot too, but, like many others, it'll be a while.>
Anyway DB pretty much covered all my other problems
with the fic. I'll just say kudos on writing a Lain
fic that stayed true to the original so well and leave
it at that.
<Thanks. :) I really appreciate C&C like this.>
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Now, for the onlist replies;
Adrian Thymes: I noticed the character mistakes too. I'll make sure to keep it as a text file *out* of Word so the formatting problems won't return. But I can't guarantee that since I use Word primarily. If there's any shareware/freeware word processors out there than I use, I'm more than willing to try them.
DB Sommer:
<Lain's a rare one to pop up here. Of course, I didn't really care for the series, so...>
*shrugs* No biggie. I can also understand why a lot of people would have a hard time with it since it doesn't exactly follow normal storytelling conventions... or at least, that's how I see it.
>>chance to say goodbye. And now, wherever Alice was, Lain >>was not.
>Interesting way of putting it.
I thought so too. That's why I used it.
>>Walking through what looked like a gate, she strolled
>>through a park that still remained as it was, despite her
>>condition. Lain liked parks. Parks always seemed to calm >>her troubled mind, even in this frame of perspective.
>'frame of perspective' seems a bit off, though. Might want
>to reword it.
Hmm, would 'point of view' work better, you think?
>>Whenever she thought of them they
>them, they (I think)
Yes, you're right. I'll be sure to fix that.
>> also seemed to appear... or did she appear in one? It
>>mattered little.
>It might matter to the park. :)
Heh. It never occured to me that parks have feelings too. :p
>>Sitting on a rock, she watched existence pass by in an
>>instant. Everything passed by and passed on. None would
>>notice her. It was nothing knew. Was it?
>>?Not really.?
> Odd characters here
I'm not sure if it's my email client or the coding from Word (or both) that's making those characters appear where there should be quotation marks.
>>?What is this place??
>>?It is what it is. And it is where we are.?
>>She blinked at his answer
> Don't know why. She's used to the duality. :)
Or is she? :p
>> The man turned towards her and said in a manner of a
>>father gently chiding his offspring. ?You didn?t listen. >>I said: No one is ever really forgotten.?
> Man: I think. If some are forgotten, I don't remember. I
>guess I forgot them.
It may be just me, but that sounds like something Terry Pratchett would have said. (Side note: I just finished 'Mort' recently and I loved it.)
>> She sat on the rock beside him and looked into the same
>>place he did, digesting his words carefully. If no one is
>>forgotten, she wondered, and then
> think you can drop 'and'
Will do.
>>She noticed a small smile tugging at the corners of his
>>lips when he answered, ?A name that I nearly forgot a long >>time ago. Among my people, I was named
> Wade. It's a good name, and easy to pronounce.
Heh. bet Ten Oh wishes he had a name like that every once it a while.
>> I wish I had a basic explanation as to what the heck
>>happened, but I'm still sorting out the details.
> It happens. Sometimes you just have to go with the flow.
*nods* And who knows, maybe if I keep it up, I'll eventually write something good. :)
>> As for Lain?s companion, I would doubt that Ten Oh would
>>act like Kujaku, but since this would take place a long
>>time after the end of RG Veda,
> Only saw a bit of that, and don't remember it anymore. I'll >have to rewatch it someday. Once I'm finished with my
>current anime
I remember seeing the anime, but most of my source material came from the manga since I own it. (Thank heaven for web translations.)
> Thanks for sharing.
> DB Sommer
You're welcome and thanks for reviewing.
Finally; Zorknot.
Nice fic. Really captured the tone of Lain. And for the second matrix movie for that matter.
<Which actually kinda confuses me since I've not yet seen the second, nor third Matrix movie. I may eventually, but it'll probably be when I'm so bored I'd be willing to waste four hours of my life in the Wachowskian philosophical quagmire.>
Unfortunately the drawn out philosophical discussions were the worst part of both. You captured that very well, but I think it's one of those things you should just set free:-)
<Well, I was hoping to just present an open ended story that continued from the end of Lain. Truth be told, I felt the anime story was complete to the point where fanfics like this were not neccesary. But I went ahead and wrote it anyway. :)>
I wonder now though, why no one has done a Lain/Matrix
crossover? Maybe they have and I haven't seen it?
<Actually, someone has. The story was called Synthesis and from what I could tell, it starts quite a while after the end of the first movie. It's not complete and it hasn't been updated in quite a while. I emailed the author a while back and from what I remember, the author was having the usual real life interference. Oh well.
On another note, I just may brave the other two movies and endure the pain for an fanfic idea. Because I liked 'Synthesis' and figure that Lain could take on the +100 Smiths in her own way, I've been tempted to give it a shot too, but, like many others, it'll be a while.>
Anyway DB pretty much covered all my other problems
with the fic. I'll just say kudos on writing a Lain
fic that stayed true to the original so well and leave
it at that.
<Thanks. :) I really appreciate C&C like this.>
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