Jared Waddell
3rd July 2006, 10:19 PM
Numerous typos, but those aren't a problem. I'm certain you can fix them
(and I'm in too much of a hurry to point them out).
I'll give it a 3 out of 5 and ask to flesh out the scenes a bit.
Chapter 2 would seal the deal.
Later,
Rick "toobusytousespaces" Spiff
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(and I'm in too much of a hurry to point them out).
I'll give it a 3 out of 5 and ask to flesh out the scenes a bit.
Chapter 2 would seal the deal.
Later,
Rick "toobusytousespaces" Spiff
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